Assalam o ALaikum dear participants 
Sab se pehle to aapko mubarakbaad daina chahungi first round ki successful aur dhamke daar completion par ,,,aap sab ne itniiiiiii ziada zabardast tehrrerain likhi k result bnate huye meki band baj gai..
Really bohat tough competition diya aap sab ne aik dusre ko bhi aur bohat tough time diya meko bhi bohat mushkil tha marking karna cauz sabki behtareen thi!
First ROund k marks kuch is tara se hain!
Marks Arrangement:
Total=20 ( 5 for title and 15 for theme+wording etc)
kio k is thread ka maqsad aapk writing skills ko improve karna hay aur us talent ko saamne lana hay jo shayed khud aapko nhi pta k aap may hay aur aap kitna zabardast likh sakte hain ,,to is hawale se being a reader may aap sab ki individual sharings pe remarks daina chahungi tan k sabko apni khubio aur khamio se mazeed improvement ka moqa miley !
Remarks:
1.Qawareer:
AAPki tehreer bohay hi jamya thi ALfaz ka chunaao aur Istamal is qadar khubsurat tha k ak se ziada baar parhne pe bhi unki arrangement may koi khaami nhi nikaal paayi main,,,Kalam ko bohat khubsurti se add kiya aap ne,,Title bhi purkashish tha,,,,,magar behtari ki gunjaysh hamesha rehti hay so (4+14)18 points k saath aap is ROund may TOp pe hain Congratulations!
2. Neevrap:
Aapki ghaliban pehli koshish thi ye magar parh k bohat khushi hui k pehli baar may hi aap ne image ko poori tara pick kiya aur poori story ko bohat umdagi se us pe relate kiya,,,words and sentences ki arrangement mazeed behtar ho sakti thi,,baqi aayat MASHAALLAH bohat detaill se saara manzar aur kahani bayan kar rhi thi,,aahista aahista INSHAALLAH aap mazeed acha likh payaingi ,,(3+11)=14 marks gain kiye aap ne is ROund may!
3. Bela:
BEla aap ne jo theme liya wo bohat acha aur zabardast point par tha,,the only thing is, k Manzar ko poori tara explain nhi kar paayi aap aur story parhtey huye bohat zabardast to lag rhi thi magar image dakhtey huye i felt image kahi aur hi kho gya hay,,,Title bohat zabardast tha aur sentences and words ka istamal bohat khubsurti se kiya aap ne,,aap bohat acha likhti hain keep it up,,(4+12)=16 points gain kiye aap ne is ROund may!
4.Sweet-girl:
Sweet girl bohat interesting story likhi aap ne sab se munfarid hone k saath saath manzar may aik alag hi rang bhar diya aapki story ne,,alfaz aur jumley itne khubsurat bnaaye apa ne parh k bohat maza aaya,,jo nazam relate ki it was amazing ,,aap is round ki 2nd position par hain (4+13)=17 points k saath,,Congratulations!
5.Khwahish:
Khwahish sis aapki kahani aur title nice tha simple sa,,,aap bhi ghalliban first time likh rhi hain aur bohat had tak manzar pe poora utara...magar tehreer likhtey huye aik hi jumla baar baar repeat nhi hona chahiye is se points minus ho jaate hain,,,,jumlon aur alfaz ka istamal bhi mazeed behtar kiya ja sakta tha ,,umeed hay aap aaynda bhi likhti rhaingi aur mazeed behtar bnayaingi apne writing skilss is Round may aap ne (3+10)=13 marks gain kiye!
6.Muslim:
Muslim bro aapki kahani khaas tor pe nazam bohat khubsurat tasur de rhi thi aur bohat jamya tareeqe se manzar ko bayan kiya aap ne,,,nazam sab se jaandar rhi bharpoor tareeqe se manzar ko bayan kar gai ,,tehreer mazeed purasar ho sakti thi alfaz mazeed behtar ho sakte thay ,,par itna zarur kahungi aap k writing skills bohat ache hain is Round may aap k points (3+12)=15 hain!
7.Detective:
Detective sis aapka title acha tha as a story theme bhi acha tha,,magar Story aage ja kar Manzar se thori hat gai thi,,,jumley aur words ka istamal mazeed behtar ho sakta hay ,,,Aaynda bhi likhti rhain INSHAALLAH mazeed improvement hogi is Round may aap k points (3+10)=13 hain!
8.Tooba khan:
Tooba aapki story jab maine parhni shuroo ki to maire expressions aise thay wowww amazing ,,,title samait aaghaz ohat zabardast thay maire mind may yhi rha k toobi baazi le gai magar mid may ja kar manzar peeche reh gya kahani aage chali gai aur last parh k bhi manzar se thori door nazar aayi,,,,haan aik cheez jumley aur alfaaz aap k bhi bohat zabardast aur bohat ache tareeqe se istamal huye thay aapko amzeed likhtey rehna chahiye! is Round k points (4+12)=16 hain!
9.Whiteros:
Whiteros bohat chulbuli sis,,,mukhtasir si magar bharpoor tareeqe se manzar ko bayan karti hui story thi aapki parhtey huye manzar may jaan aa gai thi ,,parh k maza aaya alfaz ka chunao aur istamal bohat acha rha,,title bhi nice tha Overall it's gud attempt! aap (3.5+13)=16.5 marks k saath is Round ki 3rd position par hain COngratulations!
last may itna kehna chahungi k ye sirf first Round ka result hay Overall result 4th round k baad sab rounds ka grand total akrne pe baneyga,,Is Round may bhi bohat close hain marks sab k ,,to aaynda k rounds k liye tyar rahiye daikhtey hain k kon kisko beat kar k uski position le urta/urti hay,,,
WISH YOU ALL THE VERY BEST!
Result ya Round se related kisi kisam ki confusion ho to dil may koi baat mat rakhiye feel free to discuss with me
@ مسلم
@RedRose64
@whiteros
@neevrap
@Tooba Khan
@Bela
@Khwahish
@Detective
@Qawareer
@*SHOAIB*
Sab se pehle to aapko mubarakbaad daina chahungi first round ki successful aur dhamke daar completion par ,,,aap sab ne itniiiiiii ziada zabardast tehrrerain likhi k result bnate huye meki band baj gai..
Really bohat tough competition diya aap sab ne aik dusre ko bhi aur bohat tough time diya meko bhi
bohat mushkil tha marking karna cauz sabki behtareen thi!First ROund k marks kuch is tara se hain!
Marks Arrangement:
Total=20 ( 5 for title and 15 for theme+wording etc)
kio k is thread ka maqsad aapk writing skills ko improve karna hay aur us talent ko saamne lana hay jo shayed khud aapko nhi pta k aap may hay aur aap kitna zabardast likh sakte hain ,,to is hawale se being a reader may aap sab ki individual sharings pe remarks daina chahungi tan k sabko apni khubio aur khamio se mazeed improvement ka moqa miley !
Remarks:
1.Qawareer:
AAPki tehreer bohay hi jamya thi ALfaz ka chunaao aur Istamal is qadar khubsurat tha k ak se ziada baar parhne pe bhi unki arrangement may koi khaami nhi nikaal paayi main,,,Kalam ko bohat khubsurti se add kiya aap ne,,Title bhi purkashish tha,,,,,magar behtari ki gunjaysh hamesha rehti hay so (4+14)18 points k saath aap is ROund may TOp pe hain Congratulations!
2. Neevrap:
Aapki ghaliban pehli koshish thi ye magar parh k bohat khushi hui k pehli baar may hi aap ne image ko poori tara pick kiya aur poori story ko bohat umdagi se us pe relate kiya,,,words and sentences ki arrangement mazeed behtar ho sakti thi,,baqi aayat MASHAALLAH bohat detaill se saara manzar aur kahani bayan kar rhi thi,,aahista aahista INSHAALLAH aap mazeed acha likh payaingi ,,(3+11)=14 marks gain kiye aap ne is ROund may!
3. Bela:
BEla aap ne jo theme liya wo bohat acha aur zabardast point par tha,,the only thing is, k Manzar ko poori tara explain nhi kar paayi aap aur story parhtey huye bohat zabardast to lag rhi thi magar image dakhtey huye i felt image kahi aur hi kho gya hay,,,Title bohat zabardast tha aur sentences and words ka istamal bohat khubsurti se kiya aap ne,,aap bohat acha likhti hain keep it up,,(4+12)=16 points gain kiye aap ne is ROund may!
4.Sweet-girl:
Sweet girl bohat interesting story likhi aap ne sab se munfarid hone k saath saath manzar may aik alag hi rang bhar diya aapki story ne,,alfaz aur jumley itne khubsurat bnaaye apa ne parh k bohat maza aaya,,jo nazam relate ki it was amazing ,,aap is round ki 2nd position par hain (4+13)=17 points k saath,,Congratulations!
5.Khwahish:
Khwahish sis aapki kahani aur title nice tha simple sa,,,aap bhi ghalliban first time likh rhi hain aur bohat had tak manzar pe poora utara...magar tehreer likhtey huye aik hi jumla baar baar repeat nhi hona chahiye is se points minus ho jaate hain,,,,jumlon aur alfaz ka istamal bhi mazeed behtar kiya ja sakta tha ,,umeed hay aap aaynda bhi likhti rhaingi aur mazeed behtar bnayaingi apne writing skilss is Round may aap ne (3+10)=13 marks gain kiye!
6.Muslim:
Muslim bro aapki kahani khaas tor pe nazam bohat khubsurat tasur de rhi thi aur bohat jamya tareeqe se manzar ko bayan kiya aap ne,,,nazam sab se jaandar rhi bharpoor tareeqe se manzar ko bayan kar gai ,,tehreer mazeed purasar ho sakti thi alfaz mazeed behtar ho sakte thay ,,par itna zarur kahungi aap k writing skills bohat ache hain is Round may aap k points (3+12)=15 hain!
7.Detective:
Detective sis aapka title acha tha as a story theme bhi acha tha,,magar Story aage ja kar Manzar se thori hat gai thi,,,jumley aur words ka istamal mazeed behtar ho sakta hay ,,,Aaynda bhi likhti rhain INSHAALLAH mazeed improvement hogi is Round may aap k points (3+10)=13 hain!
8.Tooba khan:
Tooba aapki story jab maine parhni shuroo ki to maire expressions aise thay wowww amazing ,,,title samait aaghaz ohat zabardast thay maire mind may yhi rha k toobi baazi le gai magar mid may ja kar manzar peeche reh gya kahani aage chali gai aur last parh k bhi manzar se thori door nazar aayi,,,,haan aik cheez jumley aur alfaaz aap k bhi bohat zabardast aur bohat ache tareeqe se istamal huye thay aapko amzeed likhtey rehna chahiye! is Round k points (4+12)=16 hain!
9.Whiteros:
Whiteros bohat chulbuli sis,,,mukhtasir si magar bharpoor tareeqe se manzar ko bayan karti hui story thi aapki parhtey huye manzar may jaan aa gai thi ,,parh k maza aaya alfaz ka chunao aur istamal bohat acha rha,,title bhi nice tha Overall it's gud attempt! aap (3.5+13)=16.5 marks k saath is Round ki 3rd position par hain COngratulations!
last may itna kehna chahungi k ye sirf first Round ka result hay Overall result 4th round k baad sab rounds ka grand total akrne pe baneyga,,Is Round may bhi bohat close hain marks sab k ,,to aaynda k rounds k liye tyar rahiye daikhtey hain k kon kisko beat kar k uski position le urta/urti hay,,,
WISH YOU ALL THE VERY BEST!
Result ya Round se related kisi kisam ki confusion ho to dil may koi baat mat rakhiye feel free to discuss with me
@ مسلم
@RedRose64
@whiteros
@neevrap
@Tooba Khan
@Bela
@Khwahish
@Detective
@Qawareer
@*SHOAIB*
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