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waqas naseer

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maine bht pehle love story likhi thi...magar woh english mei hai..urdu wordings mei nai hai..chalegi kia?....urdu meri kamzor hai bro..
ok acha theek hai meri mods se request hai k wo mere contest k rule no.4 ko edit ker k us main english bhi add ker dain.
 

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بہت اچھی کہانی کا آغاز ہوا ہے
لیکن میں یہ بات واضح کر دوں کہ ہمارے ہاں لو اسٹوری ایک خاص کیفیت کو سمجھا جاتا ہے یعنی ایک لڑکا اور لڑکی کی پیار بھری کہانی
لیکن لو سے مراد پیار ہے اور پیار و محبت پر مبنی کوئی بھی کہانی جیسے والدین سے جو انسیت ، پیار اور محبت ہوتی ہے، یا کسی بزرگ ہستی سے جو لو یعنی پیار اور محبت ہوتی ہے یا اس قسم کی کہانیوں کو بھی بیان کیا جاسکتا ہے یا صرف لڑکا لڑکی کی عشق ومعشوقی پر مبنی کہانی ہونی چاہئے
لو سے یہاں کیا مراد ہے وضاحت کردیجئے
 

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بہت اچھی کہانی کا آغاز ہوا ہے
لیکن میں یہ بات واضح کر دوں کہ ہمارے ہاں لو اسٹوری ایک خاص کیفیت کو سمجھا جاتا ہے یعنی ایک لڑکا اور لڑکی کی پیار بھری کہانی
لیکن لو سے مراد پیار ہے اور پیار و محبت پر مبنی کوئی بھی کہانی جیسے والدین سے جو انسیت ، پیار اور محبت ہوتی ہے، یا کسی بزرگ ہستی سے جو لو یعنی پیار اور محبت ہوتی ہے یا اس قسم کی کہانیوں کو بھی بیان کیا جاسکتا ہے یا صرف لڑکا لڑکی کی عشق ومعشوقی پر مبنی کہانی ہونی چاہئے

لو سے یہاں کیا مراد ہے وضاحت کردیجئے
serfarosh bhai yahan pe love story se murad sirf larka larki ki kahani se hai.
 

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main bhi ek story likhungi waqas but em not sure ke main idhar share kar sakungi ya nai
aur haan story 100 % true hai ok;);)
 

waqas naseer

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aap sab ko aik baat wazih kerdoon k jab aap story likhain to plz story ka naam wazih aur bare alfaz ki madad se likhain to mujhe contest k end main stories ikhatte kerne main dikkat na hogi.
thanks
 

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assalam alaikum
main waqas naseer aik mertaba phir aik new kahani contest jis ka naam (tm love story contest) hai k saath hazir hoon.
is contest main aap ko aik achi si love story post kerni hogi.
friends ye contest mere 1st contest ka 2nd part hai, meri first 1st kahani ka topic sabak amoz tha aur is ka topic love story hai.
contest k winner ko tm ki taraf se aik award inam main diya jai ga.

rules

1. yaad rakhain is contest main aap ko sirf
love story post kerni hai.
2. kahani post kerne ki last date 16 july
2010 at 12.00 pm pakistan time hai
3. kahani main behaya, aur beshermi k
alfaz istemal na karain.
4. kahani roman english, English aur urdu main
post kerain.
NOTE:AGER KOI MEMBER IN
4 RULES K KHILAF GAYA
TO US KI KAHANI REJECT
KER DI JAI GI.
wqaqs i have two questions....how long should the kahani be? and kya real life ka kuch kahani be likh sakhte hain ya sirf fictional?
 

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wqaqs i have two questions....how long should the kahani be? and kya real life ka kuch kahani be likh sakhte hain ya sirf fictional?
aap kahani jitni bhi long likh lain koi problem nahi and haan aap kahani real life se related bhi likh sakte hain.
 

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ok guys heres my real love story...:(
is k ek ke bol me meri zindagi ki sachai hai:(
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me pakistan me karachi k area gulistan-e-joher me rehta hun
noman grand city appartement me...
humara flat top per hai
to chat bhi humare under hi hai,
un dino me apne music ko le ker bht crazy rehta tha,
me apne friends se ghira rehta tha,
jin me mere band members bhi they,

sonia (is not her real name)
humare samne wale flat me kiraedar ban ker ai thi,
she was with her family,
wo log pehle bhi kahin kareeb hi rehte the,
but mene kabhi dekha nahi tha,
na janta tha un logun ko,

ye bat takreeban 2 saal or kuch mahino pehle ki hai
wo log shift hogae the humare samne wale flat me
jis ki window mere room ki window k thek samne hai,
n humare chat me sirf ek metre ka hi gap hai,

mujhe nahi pata tha koi new kiraedar ae hain samne wale flat me,
cuz i was interested in my music n my self,
( jesa me ab bhi hun )
mujhe nahi pata hota k mere area me kya hua,
cuz me kisi ki life mujhe ki life me interfere kerna pasand nahi,

me humesha ki tarha apne room me tez n loud awaz per music laga ker practice ker raha tha,
or singing ker rha tha,
meri window humesha khuli rehti thi samne wali,
gate gate meri nazar ek girl per pari,
jo us window se mujhe dekh rahi thi,
halki si simle, hath bandi hui,
baal khule or lambe,
ankhein nari bari,
rung fair,
kad,
normal,
ek aam si larki thi,
nothing special,
(she was sonia)
to mene wese hi usey ignore ker k,
apni practice jari rakhi,
then kafi time bad jab mene phir se ja ker window me dekha to wo ja chuki th...

then raat me,
me apne,
room me sofey per leta songs sun raha tha,
to achanak window ki taraf dekha to sonia phir se khari thi,

mene dil hi me socha...kya is larki ko or koi kam nai hai,
then me dosri girls se mobile per chat kerne laga,
jab chat khatam hui to mene phir se dekha to sonia nai dikhi,
me uth ker window k pas gaya to dehka,
sonia apni bhatiji k sath khel rahi thi or dance ker rahi thi,
she was looking realy sweet,
mujhe hansi bhi a rai thi
but pata nai kya tha us lamhe me,
k me bas usey dekhta hi raha,

mere pas kaafi girls k number they,
cuz meri uni me koi esi larki nai thi,
jis se meri bat na ho,
mene bht si khobsurat larkia dekhi thin,
un me se kuch ne mujhe purpose bhi kia tha,
but un dino me,
cuz of my concerts on uni,
mujhe bht si larkia like kerti thi,
but me sirf music me hi dihan deta tha,
or girls se sirf bat hi kerta tha,

yw love wagera per belive nahi kerta tha,
but me larkio ko bht achi tarha janta tha,
or kudrati hi me sab ka dil bhi bht asani se jeet leta tha,

bar hal
na sonia bht khobsurat thi,
na hi koi esi bat thi,
but kuhc ajeeb si kashish thi,
jo mujhe us ki or khench rahi thi,

then us ne mujhe dekha to window per perda kerlia,
mene kaha ise kya hua?
then thori der bad halka sa perda hata ker mujhe dekh rai thi,
or jese hi dekha k me bhi usey dkeh hi raha hun,
to furun phir chup gai,

muje laga k wo mujhe ghalat na smajh rahi ho
to me wapis aya or apne sofey per leta sogaya,

kuch dino tak ese hi chalta raha,
mere dosto me bhi pata chala to sab kehne lage k yaar tere ghar k samne larki ai hai us ka number to le ker de de,
tujeh to de bhi degi,
me un sab ki batun per hasta,
but us ka ziker hote hi,
na jane me kyun kuch keh nai pata,
or hans ker sab ki bat taal deta,

phir ek din hum dostun me ese hi bat hi bat me shart lag gai,
k u sonia se bat ker k dikhao...
or me chalenges se kabhi piche nahi hat ta
to udher mene sab k samne apne style me kaha,
"adi ek hafta kya 4 din me us ka number le lega"

then mene us din se jab bhi wo muskura ker dekhti,
to me bhi wese hi dekhta,

wo khush hojati,
kabhi mujhe wo teddy dikhati,
kabhi rose,

mujhe pata tha k mujhe zada mehnat nahi kerni,
then ek din mene windo me us se kaha mujhe ap se bat kerni hai,chat pe ao,
us ne kaha me nai asakti bhai hai,
mene kah ame intezar ker rah hun,
ajnana,

then me gaya chat per,
to 5 min bad wo bhi apne chat per ai,
then us ne kaha kya bat hai,
mene kaha ap se dosti kerna chata hun,
to us ne kaha nahi me koi scene nai banana chati,
me number nahi dungi,
mujhe pata tha she likes me bas ese hi nakhre dikha rahi hai,
as all girls,

mene kaha jab tak ap nahi dengi number me niche nahi jaonga,
or yaha thand me hi khara rahunga,
or yaha machar bhi bht kaat rahe hain,

us ne kaha to khare raho...
then wo chali gai,
mene apna mobile nikala n dosri larki se chat shuru kerdi,
us ne 10 min bad niche wali window se dekha k me abhi tak uper hi hun,
then wo phir uper ai,
or kaha kya hai?

mene kaha ap ka number kya hai?
wo hasne lagi or kaha tum nai manoge,
mene kaha me bht zidi bhi hun,
phir us ne apna number dia,
n kaha k ab niche jao werna flu hojaega,

mene kaha ok,
or then us raat humne mobile per bht chat ki,
mene dostun ko bhi dosre din bata dia k mere pas us ka number hai,
n un se treat li.
per jab dostun ne kaha k chat perao kya hui,
to mene mana ker dia,

or ek dost ne chine ki koshish ki cell to me unse naraz hogaya,
ye pehla change tha mujhme
jo mene kabhi us waqt mehsus nai kia tha,
then humari bat hone lagi,
me sonia se pora din pori raat chat kerta rehta,

wo mujhe subah suabah pyar se utha deti,
miss cal ker ker ke
or hum raat bher tak chating kerte,

me gher me hi zada rehne laga,
or koi bhi moka nahi gawata sonia ko dekhne ka,

meri mama
samjh ne lagi thin,
unhun ne kaha ek din mujhe bula ker,
k soni kyun khari thi window per,
or tum usey kyu dkeh rahe they,
or mene hans ker tal dia k esi koi bat nahi mom,
mama ne kaha k dkeho beta,
wo log ache nahi hain,
mujhe pata chala hai,
tum un se duur raho,
jab bhi wo ae tum window band ker lia karo,

me us waqt un se kuch nai kaha
per un ki bat per bhi amal nai kia...
or humara pyar berta raha,

ek din mere ek dost ko pata chala,
k me serious ho gaya hun sonia se,
to us ne kaha,
adi wo larki thek nai,
mene use dosre larkon k sath ghumte hue dekha hai,
agey mat berh,
tujhe 1000 esi larkia miljaengi,
is k piche apni zindagi barbad mat ker,
per jese hi koi us ki burai kerta,
mere khoon khol ut ta,
me us se bat band kerdeta,
isi tarha apne bachpan k dost se bhi bat band kerdi,
sonia ne mujhe sab se alag kerdia,

wo kehti mujhe k apne dosto ko chordo,
mene chordiye,
muhale wale sab se mun pher lia mene,
jab k sab mujhe samjha te rahe bht,

ek din meri mom ko hakikat me pata chal gaya,
wo gusse me jane lagi un k gher,
tab mene apni kasam de ker unhe rok dia,
mama ne kaha k me kabhi nahi manogi,
mene kaha den me court marriage karunga,
meri mama ne kaha thek hai,
jo chahe karo,
or wo naraz ho ker chale gai pane room me,

me kisi bhi haal me sonia ko chorna nai chahta tha,
i was so deeply in
love with her,
k me apne gher walun k khilaf bhi jane k liye tayyar tha,
me yehi sochta tha k bad me sab man jaenge,
or sonia bhi yehi kehti k bad me sab man jaenge...


wo din tha mere bhai ki mangni ka,
us din sab khush they,
me bhi,
to
us din me jab tayyar ho raha tha,
mera dost aya,
or kehne laga,
k tujhe kuhc dikhana hai,
mujhe bina batae,
wo niche le gaya or apne ek doset se milwaya,

jo mera bhi dost tha...but zada bat nai thi,
then us ne kaha,
k sonia ka number mere pas bhi hai,
wo mujhse bhi bat kerti hai,
mene kaha kya saboot,
us ne apna mobile nikala,
or sonia ka latest u-fone ka number bataya,
mene kaha tumne kahin se lia hoga,
wo tumse bat nai ker sakti,
wo mujhse bht pyar kerti hai,
tab us ne mujhe us k sms parae,
wo perte hi mere perun k niche se zamin nikal gai,
mujhe ghabrahat hone lagi,
us ne kaha ba bhi yakeen nai ata to ye dkeho,
then jab us ne sonia ki photos wo bhi,
esi wahiyat jo me kabhi soch bhi nai sakta tha,
me usi waqt ghutno per gir gay,

mere ankhun me khud hi ansun ane lage
mere dost ne mujeh uthaya or gher per chor ker gay mujhe
or kaha k apne ap ko smbhalo me tujse bad me milta hun,
ye keh ker wo chale gaya,

jab me gher me enter hua,
to sab relatives sab gher me they,
sab khush khush they,
or me esi halat me,
me apna mun chupate hue apne room me gaya,

waha bhi aapi thi meri,
or mere behnoi,

aapi ne pehchan lia aapi ne kaha kya bat hai adi,
kia hua?

me ne rotey hue kaha kuhc nahi hua im fine,
behnui ne jab dekha unhun ne kaha nai kuch bat hai,

ab aapi mujeh mana rai hain pyar ker rahi hain,
k kya bat hai kisi ne kuch kaha kya,
or mere or bhi ansun behne lage,
mene unse hath chura ker washroom me chala gaya,
waha wall se lag ker me bht roya...
me khud ko sabhalna chahta tha,
but it was too dificult,
jitne bhi ansun pochta,
utne hi ansun or bhi atey,
khud ko miror me dkeh dekh ker,
nafrat ho rahi thi khud se,
then sab gate per agae,
washroom k knock kerne lage bhia,aapi,behnoi,
me bahar nikla meri anhkhon me stll ansun the,
phir api ne mujhe peker kaha kya bat hai adi,
mene kuch nai meri tabiyat kharab hai,
kya kehta?
jis muhabbat per khud se bhi zada trust tha,
jis ki waja se mene
apne dost,
apne muhaledar,
apni family,
even apni mom,
jinhe me dunia me sab se zada chahta hun,
un k bhi khilaf ja raha tha,
wo chand pal me hi chin gai,
wo khwab sab bikher gae,
wo sapne sab toot gae,
such mano me to zindagi hi khatam hogai thi,
sab kuch be maksad,

mere behnoi ne sab ko bahar bhaga dia,
then mujse kafi pocha mene nai bataya kuch bhi,
esi behuda wahiyat bat batata bhi to kese batata,
then unhun ne mujhe tayyar kia,
aapi ne or behnoi ne,
mangni k liye,
mee apne bhai ki mangni,
jis pe mene kaha tha,
ke me ye karunga,
wo karunga,
bilkul pheeki per gai,
me even photos me nahi hun mangni ki,
me kuch der waha ruka but per jab dil nai mana to bina kisi ko batae
gher agaya,
gher a k dekha to sonia k sms n miss calls thi,
(cuz mene abhi tak usey nai batya tha)
then mene usey cal ki,
n pocha,
k meri kya ghalti thi,
kyun mere sath ese kehla?
wo shuru me to bht kehne lagi tume koi ghalat fehmi hui,
phir jab mene kaha k mene tumare wahiyat sms or photos bhi dekhi hian,
to wo chup hogai,
then kehne lagi,
k oo to tume pata chal hi gaya hai,
phir us ne ikrar kia k wo mere sath sirf khel rahi thi,
n us k ye last words ne meri dunia hi khtam kerdi thi,
"i just play with u cuz u were cute little toy"
mene ye sun ne k bad bina kuhc kahe cal kat di,
n then gher me dhundne laga knife,
room look tha
to mom k kamre se mene neend ki tablets ka
pora pakcet kha lia,
n then apne room k sare saman torne laga apne hathun se,
mujhse bht bari bari ghalti hogai thi,
mujhe khud se nafrat hogai thi,
achanak mujeh chakar jese feel hua
or ankhun k agey andhera agay
then mujhe kuch yaad nai,
dosre din morning me meri ankh khuli to
i was in hospital,
mere behnoi mujhe thek time per le ae they,
werna shayad aj me yaha nai hota,
wo mera picha kerte hue gher agae they,
to uneh me floor per para mila
mere hath zakhmmi they,
or pas hi neend ki golio ka packet dkehte hi
wo foran mujhe hospital le gae,
dostors ne vomit kerwa k sari tablets nikal di thi,

mene phir hospital me hi sab se maafi mangi,
or merimom wo to itni khafa hogai thin,
k room me bhi nai arahi thin,
bahar hi khare ro rahi thi,
then mene mom ko bula ker maafi mangi,
or wada kia k me ab ap jesa kahogi me wesa hi karunga,

meri mom ne bhai se bat ker k mujhe dubai bhej dia,
unhun ne kaha k yaha rahoge to,
or upset hogey,

ab is bat ko itna arsa hogaya,
me koshish kerta hun k bht khush rahun,
but phir bhi aksar tanhai me...
upset hojata hun...
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us ne mujhe sab se china...
then mujhe akela ker k chor dia...
ese sehra me...jahan tanhai ki hi barish hai...
:(:(:(
 
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