Dharte Mattah Ki Pojaran

[Toobi]

array ko ko korooooo ko tak parhi thi na to wahan tk story achi lagi islye wahan tak ka reply krdya ab baqi b parh rha hon parhne ke bad uska reply b krdunga wait to karo thora[DOUBLEPOST=1347170022][/DOUBLEPOST]haan tooba now puri read kalri MashAllah se kafi achi kahani likhi hai u ne

again jhoot...any way thx[DOUBLEPOST=1347171228][/DOUBLEPOST]

Buhat khobsurat tehreer likhi hey tooba mai'n ney lafzoo'n ka chunao aur unka jumloo'n mai'n mai'n istimaal ek dam perfect tha isi liye buhat pur asr bhi hey, manzer nigari key hawaley sey bhi mujhey tehreer buhat pasand aai mairey khayal mai'n tumhai'n mustaqil likhn achahiye, mazeed ka intizar rahey ga,hamaisha khush aur salamet raho,Ameen

ap jesay behtareen writer k comments parh kar sacche sero khoon barh giya hay mera...hosla afzaye ka bht bht thanks bhai...so nice of u..

 

[Jahil]

nhi tooba suchi boht achi story likhi hai u ne maine puri parhi hai start se end tk

 

[Toobi]

Buhat khobsurat tehreer likhi hey tooba mai'n ney lafzoo'n ka chunao aur unka jumloo'n mai'n mai'n istimaal ek dam perfect tha isi liye buhat pur asr bhi hey, manzer nigari key hawaley sey bhi mujhey tehreer buhat pasand aai mairey khayal mai'n tumhai'n mustaqil likhn achahiye, mazeed ka intizar rahey ga,hamaisha khush aur salamet raho,Ameen

http://www.tafrehmela.com/threads/farishte-se-behtar-hai-insan-banna-my-2nd-afsana.171720/
http://www.tafrehmela.com/threads/siraat-e-mustaqeem-mera-pehla-afsana.168116/

 

[Lost Passenger]

again jhoot...any way thx[DOUBLEPOST=1347171228][/DOUBLEPOST]
ap jesay behtareen writer k comments parh kar sacche sero khoon barh giya hay mera...hosla afzaye ka bht bht thanks bhai...so nice of u..

Arey kaha'n key writer bus aisey hi thora buhat likh ker insan writer thora hi ban jata hey ye tu tum behen bhaiyoo'n ki muhabbet hey key mairi hosla afzai fermatey hai'n warna mai'n kia aur mairi ouqaat kia hamaisha khush aur salamet raho,Ameen

 

[*Muslim*]

nice try
kaafi lambi kahani hy
but ye title muje thik ny laga aur wu musalman hu ke bhi dharti mata aur uski poojaran kehna kch samajh ny aya

 

[saimkhan60]

nae wo log yad karahay tay test,then magrib ki nimaz parh k foran end likka,baqe story yaha save rakki te manay,nd jalde bs post karde...aj sunday hay to aj b bolwaya hay manay tution parhanay k lie...itne ghair zimadar nae ho may acha[DOUBLEPOST=1347168626][/DOUBLEPOST]
ok w8 karonge may..[DOUBLEPOST=1347169142][/DOUBLEPOST]@saimkhan60
@raat ki rant

hmmm nyc story

 

[AshirFrhan]

Congrats Fatima
The Notion In Which You Reveals The Beauty Of A Simple Image Is Awesome.
Keep It Up.
GOOD LUCK

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[Toobi]

nice try
kaafi lambi kahani hy
but ye title muje thik ny laga aur wu musalman hu ke bhi dharti mata aur uski poojaran kehna kch samajh ny aya

thx 4 ur coments..
yeap khani aksar lambi he hote hay...wesay b kahani short ho ya lambi,@hoorain nay jub mare hosla afzaye ki hay its mean teek he hoge na..
apnay shaied khani teek say parhe nae..neeto muslim nae te..nd dharte matah meanz mother land...so nd may apnay sarzameen ki bete ki jan bacha kar,or kalma parh kar usnay apni mitte say mohabbat honay ka saboot diya ta..

 

[Wasif Safi]

Waah Toobi kya jumle likhe hai u ne bohot hi baariki se jumlon ko istemaal kiya hai..
Aur words bhi kaafi impressive hai
Overall saari story bohot hi zabardast hai
All d Best

 

[Toobi]

Congrats Fatima
The Notion In Which You Reveals The Beauty Of A Simple Image Is Awesome.
Keep It Up.
GOOD LUCK

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thank ashir[DOUBLEPOST=1347204546][/DOUBLEPOST]

Waah Toobi kya jumle likhe hai u ne bohot hi baariki se jumlon ko istemaal kiya hai..
Aur words bhi kaafi impressive hai
Overall saari story bohot hi zabardast hai
All d Best

thank u waisf...[DOUBLEPOST=1347204780][/DOUBLEPOST]@Sparkofighter[DOUBLEPOST=1347204813][/DOUBLEPOST]@Atif-adi[DOUBLEPOST=1347204860][/DOUBLEPOST]@mirza37

 

[mirza37]

Zabardast likha hai
wording bhi bohot kamal ki hai aur manzar kashi bhi achi ki hai.
lafzon par control bhi acha rakha hai kahin koi sentence be maqsad maloom nhi howa Everything is perfect

 

[Ghazal_Ka_Chiragh]

Assalaamu alaikum Tooba aapi

Masha'ALLAH bohot hi pyaari likhi hai aap ne

bilkul hi dul chhoone waali

@Tooba Khan .

 

[mirza37]

DEKH LO.. CHIGOO BHAI,, TOOBA KO ANY DO,,

 

[Toobi]

Assalaamu alaikum Tooba aapi

Masha'ALLAH bohot hi pyaari likhi hai aap ne

bilkul hi dul chhoone waali

@Tooba Khan .

thank u so much saif...so nice of u[DOUBLEPOST=1347249188][/DOUBLEPOST]

DEKH LO.. CHIGOO BHAI,, TOOBA KO ANY DO,,

thank u mirza bhai apki hosla afzaye bht eham hay maray lie...thanks a lot

 

[*Sonu*]

wow bht hi acha likha hai ap na tooba sis​

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quite emotional & heart touching story​

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All the very best​

 

[Toobi]

thanks sono

 

[Ghazal_Ka_Chiragh]

DEKH LO.. CHIGOO BHAI,, TOOBA KO ANY DO,,

Yeh Chigoo bhaiya koun ??

 

[cute bhoot]

Yeh Chigoo bhaiya koun ??

kitna pyara name hy mujy tu abi pata chala chigoo bhaiya

 

[Ghazal_Ka_Chiragh]

kitna pyara name hy mujy tu abi pata chala chigoo bhaiya

Bhai mein Chigoo bhaiya khaali Asma baji ka hoon aur kisi ke liye nahin

 

[cute bhoot]

Bhai mein Chigoo bhaiya khaali Asma baji ka hoon aur kisi ke liye nahin

na g na ab tu mery b chigo bhaiya ho